Teddy bear picnic
wow it was a beautiful sunny morning.There were three little teddy bears and two big bears, their name’s are Ella, Romilly, Lily and the two big bear’s were called Katy and Ben. The bear’s wanted to have a picnic for lunch but where was the food? So the big bears climbed the biggest tree in the world. The bears found honey so they brought it down the tree.
Wow Ella, I was just visiting the 5SC blog to see how many people had written for the challenge this week when I found your writing. Someone from the next-door-class - it is a small world!
ReplyDeleteYour story is great Ella. I like the way you have used capitals for names and used a comma between items in a list.
Challenge:
Don't use a comma just for a plural:
name’s = names
bear’s = bears
Allana - teacher from New Zealand
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