On sunday five little teddy bears were having a picnic watching the summer day go past. 'WOW Jim your eating a massive cookie fast'. 'Its a vanilla one Ginger'. 'Thats amazing tea Yogee'. 'Thank you James, it is made out of tea leaves'.
I really like how you set the scene for your 5 sentences. It's sounds like the teddies are having a great time chatting with one another. Try not to use too much speech, as the reader can loose track of who's speaking.
From Mrs Burnett (Team 5SC) Auckland, NZ www.uhpsroom172014.blogspot.com
Hi Sonya
ReplyDeleteI really like how you set the scene for your 5 sentences. It's sounds like the teddies are having a great time chatting with one another. Try not to use too much speech, as the reader can loose track of who's speaking.
From Mrs Burnett (Team 5SC)
Auckland, NZ
www.uhpsroom172014.blogspot.com